Hi Dayton I am Kingi and I go to Paihia School I am Yr 7 I like your metaphor poem it has a lot of description about yourself. Maybe next time add a bit more detail to what you are describing. But other then that yours is very good keep up the good work.
Hello, Dayton, I'm Ciaran from St Patrick's, I like your metaphor poem because descrition about yourself is great. Thanks, have a great day!